One Day, Part 2, page 8
on August 27, 2013 at 12:01 amChapter: One Day
Location: Billie's parents' house
Here. This is a part I like. It’s a good page. And I’m always a sucker for a quick succession of facial expressions.
I’d like it even more if the rest of the story were slowed down. It’d be a more successful rhythm, more like the record scratch it needs to be, if the pages leading up to it weren’t in a similar rush.
Still: good page.
Both of the comics today featured lots of facial expressions in a line. Intentional? Or coincidence?
I wouldn’t force my current story into places just so it matched up with the rerun update schedule. I don’t think that would result in anything I’d be satisfied with.
Oh good, it’s Super-Ruth to the rescue!
Yep, this is pretty dang good! I adore hectic situations with focus on speedy, cluttered, internal panic.
Plus, I like this brief reignition after her confidence has waned. Not really in her element, but taking control of the situation.
Is there a reason this was rushed, as you keep saying it was? Or was it just a matter of a bad handle on pacing?
So, when I first read this story, I read it all together, and I think this is the page (for me) that made the earlier page you hate seem less terrible. It seemed to suggest that Ruth had her dad’s voice in her head telling her that what she did was wrong, similar to how Sal and Joyce both mention much, much later that Danny’s voice affects how they act.
This page is really well done.
That last panel reminds me so much of a particular (similar) scene in Mud.